The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.
The pie chart represents the information about the major problems which caused less productivity in agriculture. The table demonstrates the data about how these issues influenced three nations during the 1990s.
Overall
,as it is illustrated, there were 4 main causes and all of them were approximately equal except for other reasons.
In addition
, the percentage of land degradation in
Europe
was larger than
North
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America
and
Oceania
.
Initially
, over-grazing takes 35% of all reasons, which is the greater index than others.
Also
, the difference between the figures
of
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deforestation(30%) and over-cultivation(28%) was
for
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a mere 2% .
Furthermore
, taking less than
one tenth
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of all numbers, the index of other problems was the smallest among the other 3 causes. Considering the table, North
Americas
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America's
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and
Oceania
’s deforestation index were a tiny 0,2% and 1,7%, respectively,
however
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in
Europe
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Europe,
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this
problem was
the
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major and the figure showed 9,8%.
Also
, the percentage of degraded land by over-cultivation in North
America
was 3,3% and in
Europe
7,7%, meanwhile
Oceania
had no problems with
the
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over-cultivation.
Furthermore
, over-grazing influence on three nations showed 1,5% in North
America
, 5,5% in
Europe
and 11,3% in
Oceania
. In total only 5% of land
degraded
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in North
America
,
however
other
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the other
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two nations had the largest figures
such
as 23% and 13% in
Europe
and
Oceania
,respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words europe, america, oceania with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Agricultural productivity
  • Deforestation
  • Over-cultivation
  • Overgrazing
  • Soil erosion
  • Nutrient depletion
  • Land degradation
  • Soil compaction
  • Fertility
  • Preventive measures
  • Sustainable farming practices
  • Environmental impact
  • Economic implications
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