The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Make compate in' where ven bv saleting and reporting the main features, and Write at least 150 words.

The line chart illustrates the
consumption
rate
of fish, lamb,
beef
and chicken in different Europe countries from 1979 to 2002.
Overall
, consuming chicken increased dramatically over the entire period, and the
consumption
of
beef
and lamb decreased significantly.
While
the fish
consumption
rate
remained relatively stable. The
consumption
of chicken was only under 150% per
week
in 1979 and the ratio fluctuated before increasing significantly in 2004 to 240 per cent per
week
. Fish
consumption
remained constant with only 60 per cent each
week
and the
consumption
rate
dropped slightly to 50% per
week
. The
consumption
percentage of
beef
was the highest once nearly above 200% each
week
in 1979. The
consumption
of
beef
dropped slightly to 160% per
week
before the
rate
decreased dramatically in 2004 to only 120% per
week
.
While
the ratio of consumer lamb took the second place of the highest percentage of
consumption
in 1979 with 150% per
week
, the ratio consistently dropped significantly year on year to just around 70% per
week
in 2004.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, rate, beef, week with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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