The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Make compate in' where ven bv saleting and reporting the main features, and

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Make compate in' where ven bv saleting and reporting the main features, and
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The line chart illustrates the
consumption
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rate
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of fish, lamb,
beef
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and chicken in different Europe countries from 1979 to 2002.
Overall
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, consuming chicken increased dramatically over the entire period, and the
consumption
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of
beef
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and lamb decreased significantly.
While
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the fish
consumption
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rate
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remained relatively stable. The
consumption
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of chicken was only under 150% per
week
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in 1979 and the ratio fluctuated before increasing significantly in 2004 to 240 per cent per
week
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. Fish
consumption
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remained constant with only 60 per cent each
week
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and the
consumption
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rate
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dropped slightly to 50% per
week
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. The
consumption
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percentage of
beef
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was the highest once nearly above 200% each
week
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in 1979. The
consumption
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of
beef
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dropped slightly to 160% per
week
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before the
rate
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decreased dramatically in 2004 to only 120% per
week
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.
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the ratio of consumer lamb took the second place of the highest percentage of
consumption
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in 1979 with 150% per
week
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, the ratio consistently dropped significantly year on year to just around 70% per
week
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in 2004.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, rate, beef, week with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • trend
  • significant
  • fluctuation
  • anomaly
  • popularity
  • compared to
  • increase
  • decrease
  • overall
  • specific
  • notable
  • unexpected
  • observed
  • health concerns
  • economic factors
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