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The chart below shows the results of a European survey into young people's expectations for change in five different areas of life in the next 20 years. They were asked if they thought things would improve or get worse.

The chart below shows the results of a European survey into young people's expectations for change in five different areas of life in the next 20 years. They were asked if they thought things would improve or get worse.
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The bar chart illustrates data concerning the prediction of young individuals for alteration in five parts of life
incuded
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included
 communication between
people
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,
quality
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 of food,
quality
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 of
water
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,
quality
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 of air in cities and health. From
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overall
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an overall
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 perspective, the highest improvement which young adults
expect
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 was for communication between
people
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 and
quality
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 of
water
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,
while
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 they assumed
quality
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 of life and
quality
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 of
water
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will
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 be worse.
According to
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 the chart, communication between
people
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 stood at the highest
precentage
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percentage
 of positive perspective for improvement with 54%.
Furthermore
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, almost half of the
people
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 were
optimestic
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optimistic
 about improvement in
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quality
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the quality
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 of
water
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.
On the other hand
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, seven in ten of the individuals expect adverse
situation
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situations
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 in
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quality
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the quality
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 of air in cities.
Moreover
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,
three fifths
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 of them expect
decline
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a decline
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 in
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quality
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the quality
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 of
water
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, quality, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "improvement" was used 3 times.
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