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Some people believe that following health advice on the Internet is a good thing. However, some others claim that online health advice should not be followed. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #health #advice #internet
I Totally believe that the
internet
 could be a disaster when it comes to
a health advice
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health advice
a piece of health advice
a bit of health advice
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! humans
comes
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come
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 in
diffrent
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different
dignoess
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diagnoses
 so you will never
guss
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guess
 until you
vist
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visit
 a doctor. the
internet
 is
willd
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a wonderful
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 place anyone, from everywhere can write his
on
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own
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 description, he could be a
9 yesrs old
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9-year-old
 kid and
having
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have
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 his health website! there
so
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are so
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 many reasons why would i agree with
second
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a second
the second
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 opinion, your own will
benign
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apply
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is the most
impotent
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important
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 thing and you should invest in it, by monthly check at a local hospital with a doctor
that
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who
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 knows
you
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your
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 history, and you can have a chat with, he can see for real
depans
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depends
 on your own symptoms. but
on the other
hand
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hand,
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 it's okay to have
a
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apply
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general knowledge about anything you want to know about, as long it's safe,
suite
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suitable
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 for you and
you
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you have
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 been reading about it for so long and the information was
giving
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given
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 by
a real doctors
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real doctors
a real doctor
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.
To sum up
, in my opinion,
every thing
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everything
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 in life has to
faces
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face
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 it's the way we deal with it. it could
the
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be the
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 worst thing that ever
happen
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happened
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 to us, Or exactly the opposite.. as a human using the
internet
 it's so
importent
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important
 to use your brain before you jump into anything that the
internet
 offers you.
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coherence cohesion
Improve sentence structure and grammar to enhance readability.
task achievement
Provide more balanced and developed arguments for both perspectives.
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Include clearer examples to support the main points.
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The writer expresses a clear personal opinion on the topic.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion summarizes the opinion effectively.
task achievement
An attempt is made to discuss both sides of the argument.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health advice
  • Internet
  • believe
  • good thing
  • claim
  • followed
  • discuss
  • views
  • opinion
  • advantages
  • access
  • information
  • resources
  • convenience
  • flexibility
  • connect
  • concerns
  • alternative
  • complementary
  • treatments
  • disadvantages
  • credibility
  • unreliable
  • sources
  • misinterpretation
  • misunderstanding
  • overwhelm
  • conflicting
  • advice
  • opinions
  • potential
  • self-diagnosis
  • self-medication
  • personal opinion
  • beneficial
  • wisely
  • cautiously
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