Nowadays many people wear western clothes rather than their traditional clothes. What are the reasons for it? Is it a positive or negative development?
Traditional
clothes
only wear
a traditional Wrong verb form
worn
people
likely western
Capitalize word
Western
clothes
but they do not understand all countries have a
traditional Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
clothes
.
In my opinion
all Add a comma
opinion,
people
wear a
traditional Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
clothes
because they know a
Correct article usage
the
culture
and they know a
own Change the word
their
history
. Now we see only similar people
this
situation not only Change preposition
in this
clothes
they are similar things or behavior
. Change the spelling
behaviour
For example
we walk a
downtown the Correct article usage
apply
girl
similar Fix the agreement mistake
girls
clothes
this
is a wear white basic
Correct word choice
apply
t-shirt
and denim trousers maybe have a red bag and mostly wear Fix the agreement mistake
T-shirts
a
white Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
adidas
sneakers. The girl similar Change the capitalization
Adidas
make up
they Correct your spelling
make-up
are have
Change the verb form
have
a
pink lipgloss on their lip and they have Correct article usage
apply
a
pink blush on their faces. They only think new boyfriend and think about new Correct article usage
apply
clothes
. They usually resarch
Correct your spelling
research
link
for Fix the agreement mistake
links
instagram
and they Change the capitalization
Instagram
similar
Add a missing verb
are similar
folowing
Correct your spelling
following
blogger
. I am upset Fix the agreement mistake
bloggers
for
Change preposition
about
this
situation they do not know culture
or Correct article usage
the culture
history
. Yes, they prefer own
Correct pronoun usage
their own
clothes
or make-up but we must know culture
, Add an article
the culture
history
and traditional clothes
.
This
is the same for men. They only wear black
Add an article
a black
t-shirt
and denim trousers and they have a similar phone but they know Fix the agreement mistake
T-shirts
culture
, Add an article
the culture
history
and traditional clothes
.
Some people
argue that everyone should wear whatever clothes
they want and if they want to culture
and history
they do not need a
traditional Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
clothes
. If they wear a
Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
clothes
they will put themselves in the shoes of their ancestors so they want to culture
and history
.
This
problem only solving people
want to wear a
traditional Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
clothes
and they want to learning
Change the verb
learn
culture
.
Correct article usage
the culture
This
subject should be taught as a lesson in school and they
teachers should make children love Correct your spelling
the
history
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task achievement
Try to develop ideas more fully with clear examples and explanations. This will enhance the overall argument and make it more persuasive.
coherence cohesion
Improve logical flow by organizing paragraphs clearly. Each paragraph should focus on a single main point.
task achievement
The essay addresses the topic by pointing out some reasons why people might prefer Western clothes over traditional ones, such as lack of cultural awareness and preference for modern style.
coherence cohesion
The author attempts to offer a solution by suggesting education about traditional clothing in schools, which shows an effort to address the problem.
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