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The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.

The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.
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The
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 pie charts show data on the
electricity
production
 from fuel sources in
Australia
 and in
France
 in 1980 and 2000. As is observed from the pie charts, coal was the main source of
electricity
production
 in
Australia
while
France
 used nuclear power more in recent years to produce their
electricity
 demand.
According to
 the given data,
Australia
 produced 100
units
 of
electricity
 in 1980 and 170
units
 in 2000
while
 the
production
 in
France
 was 90
units
 and it doubled in the year 2000. In
Australia
, coal was the main source of
electricity
production
 and half of the total
electricity
 produced came from coal in 1980. Natural gas and hydropower contributed
of
Change preposition
to
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 producing 20
units
 of
electricity
while
 the remaining 10
units
 were produced from oil. The dependency on coal increased in 2000 for
electricity
production
while
 oil and natural gases were very minimally used for
electricity
production
. Nuclear power was not used in
Australia
 as a source for producing
electricity
.
On the contrary
, in
France
, natural gas and coal together produced half of the
electricity
 in 1980. The use of nuclear power increased significantly in
France
 in 2000 amounting to 126
units
this
 year compared to 15
units
 20 years ago.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, production, australia, france, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Electricity production
  • Fuel source
  • Renewable sources
  • Non-renewable sources
  • Significant change
  • Evolved
  • Dominant source
  • Introduction of new sources
  • Reliance
  • Electricity production mix
  • Environmental implications
  • Future trend
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