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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
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The pie charts illustrate the proportion of
water
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 used for different purposes in six regions worldwide.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 primary
water
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 is used for agricultural
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purpose
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purposes
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 in South
America
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, Africa, Central
Asia
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, and South East
Asia
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while
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 North
America
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 and Europe
used
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 primary
water
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 for industrial
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purpose
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purposes
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. Looking at the information in more detail, we can see that over three-fourths of
water
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allowcated
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allocated
allowed
 for agricultural
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purpose
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 in South East Asian, Africa, and Central
Asia
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, with 81%, 84% and 88%, respectively, followed by South
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america
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, with 71%,
finally
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, North
America
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 and Europe, with 39% and 32%, respectively.
By contrast
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,
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Europe
 used over half of
total
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the total
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water
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 for industrial
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purpose
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purposes
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, with 53%, next is North
America
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, with 48%, and other areas used only under 12% for
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purpose
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. Eventually, there are over 10% of
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water
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 used for domestic aim in North
America
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, South
America
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, and Europe
however
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 only under 10% of
water
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 were
allowcated
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allowed
 for
this
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purpose
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 in Africa, Central
Asia
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, and South East
Asian
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Asia
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, purpose, america, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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