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Your local hospital has advertised for people to do unpaid work helping at the hospitsal. You would like to do some work at the hospital in your free time. Write a letter to the hospital. In your letter -explain why you would like to do unpaid work at the hospital -say what type of unpaid work you would be able to do -give details of when you would be available for this work

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
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 letter to inform you that I saw your advertisement on
social
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a social
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 media app for volunteer
work
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 in
hospital
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a hospital
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 and I want to apply for it. Recently, I
am
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have
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 done with my college studies and want to spend my spare time in good
work
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 that helps society and with
a good luck
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good luck
a bit of good luck
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 I came to know about your
adverstisement
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advertisement
. I feel so lucky that I help whether
this
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 help is for the patients or any
work
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 of
hospital
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. Basically, my type of unpaid
work
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 is to help the patients in
hospital
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the hospital
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 like helping them to walk or take care of their medicines and their physical health. I feel so lucky and blessed if
u
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you
 gave me
this
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 position.
Moreover
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, I
also
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 had
a
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 experience in
healthcare
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the healthcare
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 industry.
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, I am available to
do
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work
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for
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full time
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 on weekdays
as well as
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 on weekends as I am totally free from my studies and want to invest my recreational time in good
work
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Coherence and Cohesion
In the letter, the ideas are generally well-organized, but try to clarify and separate different ideas or points into distinct paragraphs, such as the reasons for volunteering and your availability, to improve coherence.
Task Achievement
Avoid minor grammatical errors and typos to enhance the overall tone and professionalism of your letter.
Task Achievement
The letter addresses all parts of the task, providing reasons for wanting to volunteer, the type of work you're interested in, and your availability.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter appropriately starts with a greeting and closes professionally, maintaining a polite and respectful tone throughout.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • volunteer
  • unpaid work
  • free time
  • dedication
  • healthcare
  • assist
  • patients
  • administrative tasks
  • commitment
  • flexibility
  • personal satisfaction
  • inspired
  • community service
  • contribute
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