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Some people think that it is a waste of time for high school students to study literature, such as novels and poems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is no doubt that
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 has been an important part of human life since the beginning of civilizations.
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, there is an argument that doubts the benefit of starting to study readings
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 as novels and poems in high
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. I have a balanced view of
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 statement. Examining the idea that supports having
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 as a
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 in high
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, educational institutions must accommodate their
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' future career aspirations
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 and
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 of them is being a writer.
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, by being a writer, an individual is required to delve into
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. Starting to hone
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's skills in
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 since high
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 can be beneficial because
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 initiative prepares
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 for their college term, and later supports their professional career.
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, each person excels in different things and
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 we cannot force them to study science and math intensively.
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, high
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 is a proper educational stage for an individual to explore and choose their
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, and there is nothing wrong with introducing
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 to them.
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, it is better to make
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 an extracurricular activity rather than a mandatory
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. The reason is that there is no benefit for
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 who are interested in subjects
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 as mathematics and science.
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, making the
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subject
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 mandatory will consume
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' time to foster their knowledge in other subjects. A good case in point is that when there is a student who wants to apply for a bachelor's in
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 program,
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 student needs to foster their knowledge in the engineering field
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 of studying Javanese poems that do not deliver any technical knowledge. At its core, it is important to consider that high
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 is
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 of the capstones that are closely related to
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's professional career;
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, the most beneficial decisions are the ones that accommodate the
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' passion.
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introduction conclusion present
Ensure that both the introduction and conclusion are equally effective. Your introduction sets up the debate well, but the conclusion could reiterate your balanced stance more strongly, summarizing key points clearly.
relevant specific examples
Provide more specific examples to strengthen your argument. For instance, you could mention how literature can enhance critical thinking, creativity, and empathy skills.
complete response
Your essay demonstrates a balanced view, addressing both sides of the argument effectively.
logical structure
The points discussed are clear and generally well-organized, making the argument easy to follow.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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