Some parents believe that extra private lessons outside school hours, where students work alone with a teacher, can help them do better at school. Others disagree. What are the advantages and disadvantages of private tuition?

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a contentious issue debate for some parents, where some parents think, if their children discuss with a teacher can assist them do better at

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, other parents

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essay will examine both

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and disadvantages of private

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with, There are various advantages of private tuition

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for children under age.

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students have more time to understand more

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about

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, especially if the

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personally with

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students to understand what subject is aligned

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, personalized attention, where a tutor can tailor their teaching methods to cater specifically to a

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unique

learning style and pace, which may

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in a larger classroom setting.

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can take a

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understand deeply with details about it, because in formal education they just teach the general topics.

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disadvantages,

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as,

private

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lesson

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can be quite costly, putting a financial strain on families, which could create

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disparities

in educational success. It may

also

lead to

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over-reliance

on tutors,

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may not develop

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independent study skills, learn new materials and new methods

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put a high expectation on

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by themselves. In conclusion, even though private

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more understanding, help to

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students'

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some negative impacts, like, high cost and

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over-relience.

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Your opinion

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