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The monthly price of exported rice from ThaiLand and VietNam from 2012 to 2015 (Million dollars per tons)

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The line chart illustrates the monthly export
price
 of rice from Vietnam and Thailand between 2012 and 2015.
It is clear that
 there was a slight decrease in the
price
 for Vietnam in 2013 from
January
 to
December
.
Additionally
, there was a significant drop in the
price
 for Thailand from
January
 to May
in
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2012. In Thailand, the
price
 in 2012 dropped significantly from 510
million
 in
January
 to 440
million
 in May, but it rose sharply from May to reach 550
million
 in
December
. In 2013, there was a gradual fall from 550
million
 in
January
 to 400
million
 in
December
. Meanwhile, prices in 2014 and 2015 grew steadily throughout the four quarters, reaching around 470
million
 in
December
. In Vietnam, the
price
 in 2012 fluctuated around 400
million
 from
January
 to
December
. In 2015, there was a dramatic rise from 300
million
 in
January
 to 350
million
 in June, but it
then
 fell gradually to 320
million
 by
December
.
Additionally
, in 2013 and 2014, prices started at 340
million
 and 370
million
 in
January
, respectively, before decreasing to 320
million
 in
December
.
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introduction/conclusion present
Ensure that the introduction and conclusion are clearly defined, and consider summarizing the overall trend in the conclusion.
supported main points
While your key points are well-supported, consider elaborating on the causes of the fluctuations for a deeper analysis.
logical structure
The essay has a clear and logical structure, and each paragraph has a specific focus.
relevant specific examples
The essay provides relevant and specific figures for each trend, which strengthens the explanation.
complete response
The response fully addresses the task and provides a comprehensive overview of the chart.

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