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The bar chart below shows the percentage of unemployed graduates, aged 20-24, in one European country over of two-year period. Summerise the information and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of unemployed graduates, aged 20-24, in one European country over of two-year period. Summerise the information and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart provides key
of
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information that people how
unemployed
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many unemployed
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 graduates in European
country
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countries
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of
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last
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the last
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 2 years. The units are measured
at
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 percentages.
Overall
,
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 clear from
graph
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 that
men
was
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had
a
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 highest in October .
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,results in 2008 and 2009
shows
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men
at
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 October
was
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higher
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.
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whereas
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men
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 had
a
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 lowest in July.
According to
 what is shown, in October,
men
 and women had a higher between 20 and 25 per cent. In
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, In terms of July and
Apri
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April
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, January,
wa
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had
same
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 moderate rate compared to other sectors.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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