The table below gives information about student enrolments at Manchester University in 1937, 1967 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table provides information about
students
who register at Manchester University every fourty
years; 1937, 1967, and 2017.
Correct your spelling
forty
four
Overall
, it is obvious that 2017 had the biggest number
of students
enrolled and students
’ percentage from overseas, and 1967 recorded the highest percentage of male students
compare
to two other years. Change the form of the verb
compared
On the other hand
, the lowest number
of students
registered and those who came from outside of the United Kingdom (UK) were in 1937.
2017 recorded the highest students
enrolled at 6254 people compared to 1967 and 1937. Correct quantifier usage
number of students
This
year
also
indicates the biggest diversity of students
; 32% of students
or equal to 102 countries came from overseas. In addition
, 1967 was the second rank in term
of Fix the agreement mistake
terms
number
of Change the article
a number
the number
students
registered, and the uniqueness of this
year
was that female students
were dominating the university, even it
compared to the two other years.
Correct pronoun usage
apply
On the other hand
, the lowest number
of students
enrolled and those who came outside of the United Kingdom were in 1937 at 327. Contrast
with 2017, Change preposition
In contrast
this
year
indicates less diversity of students
, at 6% or it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
equaled
to four countries registered at Manchester University. Change the spelling
equalled
In contrast
, the percentage of male
vs Fix the agreement mistake
males
male
Fix the agreement mistake
males
in
Change preposition
apply
this
year
contrary
Add a missing verb
is contrary
with
2017, where Change preposition
to
female
at 45% and Fix the agreement mistake
females
male
at 55%.Fix the agreement mistake
males
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