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The graph below shows the average house prices in 3 countries between the years 1997-2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average house prices in 3 countries between the years 1997-2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The data provide key information about the average cost of homes in some countries in the years 1997 to 2014.
To begin
 with, all the houses in the graph
are
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increased, especially in
country
 A, which grew from approximately 125 thousand dollars in 1997 to more than half a million dollars in 2003.
Although
,
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 it is clear to the naked eye that
the
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house's
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 prices declined in 2008, except the county A,
it
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 soon recovered after that. Another information that deserves to be mentioned is that all the countries started from approximately the same point,
country
 A was the highest in the beginning and remained the highest in the end even with some decreasing in the middle. In the case of
country
 B, it started second and it became the highest in the next year,
nevertheless
, it declined again until 2014.
Lastly
, in
country
 C there is
no
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 of information to report but it was the lowest and still has the lowest house prices among all three countries.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average house prices
  • significant trend
  • fluctuations
  • comparison
  • peak
  • lowest point
  • steady period
  • economic factors
  • political factors
  • historical context
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • noticeable fluctuations
  • major changes
  • given period
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