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The diagrams below shows changes in modes of transport chosen by travellers in European country from 1950 to 1990. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below shows changes in modes of transport chosen by travellers in European country from 1950 to 1990. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart gives data about the 4 various of transportation that people one European
country
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countries
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 between 1950 to 1990.
Overall
, it was important that in trend were cars increased
while
,
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 the actives
was
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 reduced
at the end
 graph . First of all, Buses in 1990,
was
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 the first data in the chart it was an increase
just
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nuder
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under
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 20%
then
 the
numbers
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number
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 of buses
were
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hit
the
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 peak to
reach
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 above 25% in 1970.
In contrast
, in 1990 the figure
of
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 buses has been dropped to
accounted
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 for approximately 16%. On the one hand, in 1990 the car was the
mimum
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maximum
 point of travelling after that it became popular usage in 1970 to reach 25%
while
 in 1990 the number of
car
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cars
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 hit the peak point to
made
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 up just below 40%.
On the other hand
 Bike
start
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 in the beginning most popular
then
 has been decreased gradually to reduce to around 5% in 1990. The graph demonstrates the fourth part which people using on foot they hit
the
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 peak in 1990
however
 the figure
of
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foot
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feet
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was
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decline
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 in the
last
 year in the graph to reach about 7%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • changes
  • modes of transport
  • travellers
  • European country
  • 1950
  • 1990
  • summarise
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • popularity
  • time periods
  • bicycle
  • walking
  • car
  • public transportation
  • motorcycle
  • increased significantly
  • preferred mode of transport
  • stability
  • slight increase
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