IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 5.5

The diagrams below shows changes in modes of transport chosen by travellers in European country from 1950 to 1990. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below shows changes in modes of transport chosen by travellers in European country from 1950 to 1990. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
#diagrams #changes #modes #transport #travellers #european #country #summarise #information #features #comparisons
The bar chart gives data about the 4 various of transportation that people one European
country
Fix the agreement mistake
countries
show examples
 between 1950 to 1990.
Overall
, it was important that in trend were cars increased
while
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
 the actives
was
Change the verb form
were
show examples
 reduced
at the end
 graph . First of all, Buses in 1990,
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
show examples
 the first data in the chart it was an increase
just
Change preposition
of just
show examples
nuder
Correct your spelling
under
show examples
 20%
then
 the
numbers
Fix the agreement mistake
number
show examples
 of buses
were
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
hit
the
Correct article usage
a
show examples
 peak to
reach
Wrong verb form
reaching
show examples
 above 25% in 1970.
In contrast
, in 1990 the figure
of
Change preposition
for
show examples
 buses has been dropped to
accounted
Change the form of the verb
account
show examples
 for approximately 16%. On the one hand, in 1990 the car was the
mimum
Correct your spelling
maximum
 point of travelling after that it became popular usage in 1970 to reach 25%
while
 in 1990 the number of
car
Change to a plural noun
cars
show examples
 hit the peak point to
made
Change the form of the verb
make
show examples
 up just below 40%.
On the other hand
 Bike
start
Wrong verb form
started
show examples
 in the beginning most popular
then
 has been decreased gradually to reduce to around 5% in 1990. The graph demonstrates the fourth part which people using on foot they hit
the
Correct article usage
a
show examples
 peak in 1990
however
 the figure
of
Change preposition
for
show examples
foot
Fix the agreement mistake
feet
show examples
was
Verb problem
apply
show examples
decline
Wrong verb form
declined
show examples
 in the
last
 year in the graph to reach about 7%.
Submitted by sialamer on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
▼
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
▼

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
Topic Vocabulary:
  • changes
  • modes of transport
  • travellers
  • European country
  • 1950
  • 1990
  • summarise
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • popularity
  • time periods
  • bicycle
  • walking
  • car
  • public transportation
  • motorcycle
  • increased significantly
  • preferred mode of transport
  • stability
  • slight increase
What to do next:
Look at other essays: