Some people think that parents should be punished if their children commit crimes because they are responsible for their children's actions To what extent do you agree or disagree

The diagrams illustrate information concerning the process of life
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ladybug
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and
its
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anatomy. From
overall
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perspective, it is clearly evident that its life cycle
comprise
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four steps which are egg ,
larvar
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larva
larvae
larval
, pupa and adult
stage
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.
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,
lady bird
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anatomy
consist
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of eight parts. On the one hand,
in
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the process of its life
started
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from
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egg
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stages which take 2 to 5 days and
usually
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the
egges
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eggs
edges
are placed on the
leafs
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leaves
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.
Folloing
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Following
this
, they stay at
larval
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the larval
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stage
for 21 days and
then
soend
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spend
about 7 days
on
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pupa
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stage
, before turning to the adult Ladybug in
ultimate
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stage
.
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, regarding its
antomy
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anatomy
diagram, there are 8 main
part
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for it which are
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haed
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head
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with 2 antennas
and
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2 eyes and pronotum.
Furtheremore
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Furthermore
, its body
consist
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of 4
fandamental
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fundamental
area
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which are its abdomen
that
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covered by 2 wings and red elytra,
also
its legs are attached to the main part of its body.
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Spend some time expanding on each stage of the ladybug's life cycle with more detailed descriptions and explanations.
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Work on using more relevant examples to illustrate your points, especially in the discussion of the ladybug's anatomy.
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The essay correctly identifies the four stages of the life cycle of a ladybug.
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You have correctly identified the eight main parts of the ladybug's anatomy.
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The introduction is concise and provides a clear overview of what the essay will discuss.

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  • Parental responsibility
  • Upbringing
  • Influence
  • Accountability
  • Ethically justifiable
  • Legal ramifications
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  • Community programs
  • Personal choice
  • Peer influence
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