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The table and pie charts below show the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and pie charts below show the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart below gives various information about the local and international youth researchers in the Australian academies, in the year
of
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2001 & 2010.The total
number
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 of researchers in 2010 is higher than
2001
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in 2001
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,
in addition
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 to the International
students
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 comprised a significant increase
by
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 14% during 2010 in the universities. In 2001, the total
number
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 of
students
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were
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 almost 39,000, the Australian
males
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male
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 and
females
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 researchers covered the highest ratio of 44% and 43%, respectively.
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 the international
students
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 noted a small percentage with a total
number
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 of 13% in total, 9% for the international males and only 4% for the international females. During 2010, the international
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students
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 fraction significantly increased to 27%, which is about a total
number
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 of 9000
students
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,
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conversely
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 the local
students
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 recorded a reduction of 14% which is about 6000
students
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 in total, the locals still covered the biggest percentage in the two years repeatedly

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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