The chart below shows three different crimes and the number of cases committed between 1970 and 2005 in England and Wales. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows three different crimes and the number of cases committed between 1970 and 2005 in England and Wales. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given line graph provides information about three types of crimes
happened
Correct pronoun usage
that happened
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in England and Wales from 1970 to 2005.
Overall
, it is observed
mostly
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to be
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increasing
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an increasing
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trend in all cases
while
we compare their beginning and end points. Turning to the figures, we see auto theft increased to 1.6 from 0.4 million during 25 years and
then
it began to decrease to 1 million, which neither house
burgling
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burglary
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,
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apply
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nor street robbery reached to that number. The main similarity
with
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between
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car
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the car
a car
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and home theft was that both of them had
sharp
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a sharp
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increase. The other two cases' starting points were close to each other, respectively 20.000 and 10.000. There
was
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were
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fluctuations in house burgling,
whereas
the other one had
steady
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a steady
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increase during 3 decades. In the
last
5
years
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years,
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we notice growth only in street stealing,
nevertheless
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nevertheless,
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it was the smallest figure in 2005 compared to others.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • rate
  • significant
  • incidence
  • decline
  • increase
  • statistics
  • data
  • crime rate
  • comparison
  • period
  • variations
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