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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The map gives information about a
harbour
during
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the
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2000 and how it looks today after many changes.
Overall
, the
harbour
 had a lot of modifications which
result
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 in more facilities for people and more space for cars and
boats
. In
the
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2000, at the west of the
harbour
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 there
was
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 showers and toilets, and a car park connected
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 the main road. At the
east
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 it was Marina private yachts, which is the entrance of the dock. At the
northeast
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 there was a dock with space for 2
boats
 and
an
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access to the public
beach
. At the southwest there was a car park, at the east there
was
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 fishing
boats
. At the
south
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 there was a castle and a public
beach
. nowadays, after many
changes
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 the
harbour
 looks very different.
At
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 the
west
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 the showers and toilets and the car park are still there.
At
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 the
west
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 we have now fishing
boats
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more space for the
boats
 and
the
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access to the public
beach
.
At
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 the
southwest
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 we have more showers and toilets, and the carpark was modified to connect to
main
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 road. At the east there are now cafes and shops, the castle went into a hotel and the
beach
 is now private.
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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure there is a clear and concise introduction and conclusion to frame your description. Currently, the essay lacks a distinct conclusion that summarizes the main points or insights gained from the comparison.
Coherence & Cohesion
Improve the clarity by avoiding repetition and organizing information logically. For example, organizing by discussing the changes in a systematic order (e.g., start with one section of the harbor and move systematically to another) can help.
Task Response
Be more precise in your descriptions. Phrases like 'more space for boats' could include specific details, such as the number of additional berths added.
Task Response
Include more specific examples of changes, such as the new facilities added or removed, to fully illustrate how the harbor has transformed.
Task Achievement
You successfully captured the main changes between 2000 and today, allowing the reader to understand the transformations that the harbor underwent.
Coherence & Cohesion
The piece generally follows a chronological order, which makes it easier for the reader to follow the progression of changes.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harbour (or harbor)
  • docks
  • shipping lanes
  • warehouses
  • recreational areas
  • infrastructure
  • additions
  • removals
  • facilities
  • environmental sustainability
  • economic impact
  • local community
  • capacity
  • technological advancements
  • industrial shipping
  • recreational use
  • surrounding infrastructure
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