The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The map gives information about a
harbour
during
Change preposition
in
the
2000 and how it looks today after many changes.
Correct article usage
apply
Overall
, the harbour
had a lot of modifications which result
in more facilities for people and more space for cars and Wrong verb form
resulted
boats
.
In the
2000, at the west of the Change the article
apply
harbour
there Add a comma
harbour,
was
showers and toilets, and a car park connected Correct subject-verb agreement
were
with
the main road. At the Change preposition
to
east
it was Marina private yachts, which is the entrance of the dock. At the Add a comma
east,
northeast
there was a dock with space for 2 Add a comma
northeast,
boats
and an
access to the public Remove the article
apply
beach
. At the southwest there was a car park, at the east there was
fishing Change the verb form
were
boats
. At the south
there was a castle and a public Add a comma
south,
beach
.
nowadays, after many changes
the Add a comma
changes,
harbour
looks very different. At
the Change preposition
In
west
the showers and toilets and the car park are still there. Add a comma
west,
At
the Change preposition
In
west
we have now fishing Add a comma
west,
boats
and
more space for the Correct word choice
apply
boats
and the
access to the public Correct article usage
apply
beach
. At
the Change preposition
In
southwest
we have more showers and toilets, and the carpark was modified to connect to Add a comma
southwest,
main
road. At the east there are now cafes and shops, the castle went into a hotel and the Change the article
the main
beach
is now private.Submitted by daniruspi on
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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure there is a clear and concise introduction and conclusion to frame your description. Currently, the essay lacks a distinct conclusion that summarizes the main points or insights gained from the comparison.
Coherence & Cohesion
Improve the clarity by avoiding repetition and organizing information logically. For example, organizing by discussing the changes in a systematic order (e.g., start with one section of the harbor and move systematically to another) can help.
Task Response
Be more precise in your descriptions. Phrases like 'more space for boats' could include specific details, such as the number of additional berths added.
Task Response
Include more specific examples of changes, such as the new facilities added or removed, to fully illustrate how the harbor has transformed.
Task Achievement
You successfully captured the main changes between 2000 and today, allowing the reader to understand the transformations that the harbor underwent.
Coherence & Cohesion
The piece generally follows a chronological order, which makes it easier for the reader to follow the progression of changes.
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