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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph shows information about the
changes
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of
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in
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 three metals' prices over a year in 2014. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective,
nickel
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's
price
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 underwent
a significant
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a significant change
significant changes
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changes
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 compared to the data of
initial
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the initial
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 change in
price
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. Looking in more detail at
changes
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of
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in
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nickel
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's and zink's
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price
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prices
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, both illustrated a fluctuating pattern with the same trend. It is readily apparent that the difference
of
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in
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 prices for both metals experienced
two
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 drops in June and October.
In addition
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, between
these
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this two decline
these two declines
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two
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 decline,
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similarily
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similarly
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 the
changes
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 in
price
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 remained steady for three months, in July,
Aguast
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August
 and
september
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September
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. Despite all
similarities
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the similarities
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 between these
two
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, the difference
of
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in
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price
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 for zink increased in
first
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the first
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 month compared with that of
nickel
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 which significantly declined from %6 in January to %1 in March. Moving to the
changes
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of
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in
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 copper's
price
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, it is evident that after it noticeably decreased, it readily showed a considerably increasing trend which even
supressed
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suppressed
 the
two
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 other
changes
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of
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in
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 metal's
price
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,
nickel
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 and
zink
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zinc
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, at %1.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words changes, nickel, price, two with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • volatile
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • increment
  • decrement
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • increase
  • decrease
  • month-on-month
  • average monthly change
  • commodity
  • benchmark
  • trend
  • precipitous
  • plateau
  • significant
  • marginal
  • surge
  • dip
  • plummet
  • soar
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