The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The data displays the trends in
proportion
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the proportion
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of
houseworks
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housework
by washing
machine
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machines
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,
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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, and
vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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and
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apply
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in a certain nation and the number of hours
doing
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households from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
, there were increases using three electrical appliances during the entire period.
Refrigerator
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Refrigerators
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showed a significant uprising among them, and there was a decrease
of
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in
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the number of hours
doing
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spent
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washing clothes, preparing meals, and cleaning. In
first
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the first
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line chart, washing
machine
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machines
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,
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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,
vacuum
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and vacuum
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cleaner
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cleaners
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started with 40%, 30%,
0
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and 0
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% in 1920, respectively. In
first
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the first
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40 years, the consumption of
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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rocketed to 90% in 1960
while
the others showed a
gradually
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increase. The percentage of
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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was
consistantly
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consistently
the highest from 1960, with 90%,
however
, that of
vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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catched it with 100% in 2000. Both
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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and
vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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was
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the highest after 2000. In the second graph, there was a downward trend. In 1920, the number of hours for washing clothes, preparing meals, and cleaning was 50.
However
, it decreased dramatically from 50 to 20, in 1920 and 1960, respectively. After 1960, it showed a
gradually
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decrease during the entire period.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words refrigerator, vacuum with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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