People in all modern societies use drugs, but today's youth are experimenting with both legal and illegal drugs and at an increasingly early age. Some sociologists claim that parents and other members of society often set a bad example. Discuss the causes and some effects of widespread drug use by young people in modern-day society.

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young
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illustrated gradually up trend
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others often set a negative role.In my view, I think there are a variety and complex reasons
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and may have lots of bad
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, If a
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father
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to
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is acceptable for youth.Since there are
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is influenced by their parents they may mimic their
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.
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youths
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first time to see someone
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on the road, it may arouse their
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curiosity
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to try the
drugs
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.As they do not have enough
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ability and life experience.Meanwhile, the laws
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are not
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and strict, which caused
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easy to buy and some of them are legal. There are a set of effects from these
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phenomena
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Firstly
,
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young
people
use
drugs
are bad for their health.
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we can knew that after
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drugs
people
will
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them feel excited and crazy.
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cell is harmful for their brain and blood system work.
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atmosphere,
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drugs
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unstable. In conclusion, there are complex and variety
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to young
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drugs
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some feasible
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to tackle these problems.Since
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make
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badly
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society
and citizens.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Peer pressure
  • Curiosity
  • Experimentation
  • Coping mechanism
  • Normalize
  • Glamorize
  • Accessibility
  • Availability
  • Lack of education
  • Awareness
  • Mental health issues
  • Pressure
  • Modern life
  • Family influence
  • Social circles
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