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The charts below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows that salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparisons where relevant.

The charts below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows that salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart compares
differents
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choose
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 of anthropology graduates when they
finished
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 their degree.
Besides
, the table below shows the wages of the anthropologists after 5 years they worked.
It is clear that
 most of them have
a
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full-time
work
 after
graduated
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 and
the
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most
students
 who become
government
sector
 can have
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 salary above 10,000 dollars.
The most
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students
 choose full-time
work
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52%, there are followed by part-time
work
 and unemployed, with 15% and 12% respectively.There are
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13
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%
students
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of students
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 willing to have postgrad study and 8% of them are full-time
student
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.The rest of
5
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%
students
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 have part-time
work
 when they study. There are three types of
works
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 they choose, which are freelance consultants,
government
sector
 and private
companies
.After five years they
worked
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, 10%
students
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of students
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 in private
companies
 can get
the
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wages
around
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 25000 to 49999 dollars, the other two positions have the same
propotion
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proportion
 with 5%.The salaries
range
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in
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 50000 to 74999 have the same
propotion
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proportion
 situation, the private
companies
 still be the biggest group with 35%, freelance consultants and
government
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the government
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sector
 witnessed
same
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a same
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 number of 15%.The next wage level is 75000 to 99999, freelance consultants took over private
copanies
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companies
 with 40%
students
.
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, there are half of
students
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as
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in
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government
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the government
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sector
 can get over 100000 dollars,
while
 only 30%
students
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of students
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 in private
companies
 can get the same salary.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words work, students, government, sector, companies with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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