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The pie chart shows the percentage of women in poverty and the bar chart shows poverty rates by sex and age. They are from the United States in 2008.

The pie chart shows the percentage of women in poverty and the bar chart shows poverty rates by sex and age. They are from the United States in 2008.
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The provided pie
chart
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 gives data on the
percentage
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 of
females
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 in
poverty
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,
while
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 the bar
chart
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 illustrates the
percentage
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 of people who lived in
poverty
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 divided by age and sex. Both statistics are from the USA in 2008. In brief, it is evident that the most significant
percentage
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 of
women
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 living in
poverty
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 is single
females
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 with no dependent
children
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,
while
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 the number of married
women
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 with no independent
children
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 is the lowest. The bar
chart
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 shows that the highest
percentage
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 of both men and
women
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 under the age of 5 live in
poverty
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 and these two categories are almost equal. It is clearly shown in the pie
chart
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 that 54% of single
females
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 with no dependent
children
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 lived in
poverty
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 in the USA in 2008.
However
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, only 8% of
females
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 with independent
children
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, but who were married, were living in
poverty
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 in the same year and country. Regarding the bar
chart
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, more than 20% of men and
women
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 under the age of 5 lived in
poverty
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.
On the other hand
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, only about 5% of men aged 75 and older were in
this
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 income category,
whereas
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women
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 between 45 and 55 years, the
percentage
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 of which were living in
poverty
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 in the USA in 2008, was around 7%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, percentage, females, poverty, women, children with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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