Across the world, local shops are closing due to losing customers to online competitors. What problems does this produce? And what solutions can you suggest to overcome them?

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All around the world are stopping buying as they are losing customers to the online business. The principal problems

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causes are job losses and environmental impact, and solutions are public awareness and government incentives. Local

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provide employment for a number of

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, but with their closure,

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become unemployed.

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, results in the rise of the unemployment rate.

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, online

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waste much packaging

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leads to an impact negatively on the environment,

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as much CO2 in the air compared to buying locally.

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, Namshi is a significant application for shopping nowadays, but it harms the air because many planets go from one country to another for purchase. Unfortunately, the atmosphere has reduced in o2 after much steam from

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equipment. One of the possible solutions is public awareness that can be spread by small business owners themselves.

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should have the ability to know about the harmful effects of

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by using campaigns advertised by local

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to encourage

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to buy from the

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of the city from persons who leave

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, the government should provide a role to protect the native market by allocating funds

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tax, which helps tiny companies complete their work against online

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, Saudi Arabia is the best country for providing many roles to assist small

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to contain work and avoid a tax that leads to getting

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from closing. In conclusion, when we are closing small local markets and don’t care about them, that harms the environment and causes unemployment.

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effect we can handle through the roles of government and awareness among citizens.

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Your opinion

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