The table illustrates the proportion of monthly household income five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainment.

The table illustrates the proportion of monthly household income five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainment.
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The table illustrates lifestyle cost information of five different European areas - France, Germany, the UK,
Turkey
and Spain.
Also
shows the cost as a percentage by separate variety categories which are food and drink, housing, clothing, and entertainment.
To begin
with, it is easy to observe that
Turkey
citizens spend the most income on food and drink which places them significantly ahead of other country's expenses with 36%.
while
Germans had the lowest waste of money on food and drink.
Moreover
, people who live in the UK spend 37% of their salary on housing, followed by the Germans and the French where they put 33% and 31% of
incomes
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their incomes
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, respectively.
Furthermore
, France and
Spain
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individuals had the lowest proportions of buying clothes with 7% and 8% in order, compared to Germany and
Turkey
which are more interested in outfits and styles with 15% and 12% in turn.
However
,
it is clear that
Germans invest 19% of gains on quality time and
enjoying
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, ranked second to Spain citizens by 15%.
Meanwhile
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the UK and
Turkey
had approximately similar figures for lowest costs with 11% and 10% in order.
Overall
, the table displays the balancing of spending incomes on distinct household needs.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Proportion
  • Household income
  • Allocate
  • Basic necessities
  • Expenditures
  • Essentials
  • Economy
  • Living conditions
  • Standard of living
  • Cultural significance
  • Leisure activities
  • Financial prioritization
  • Noticeable trends
  • Unusual allocations
  • Society's values
  • Economic status
  • Illustrates
  • Highlights
  • Comparison
  • Analyze
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