The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995 – 2002.
The chart below illustrates the total number of
minutes
of telephone calls in UK
, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.
Correct article usage
the UK
Overall
, the chart demonstrates the total number of minutes
in billions, UK telephone calls, by category, 1995-2002, and call type consists: local — fixed line
, National and International — fixed line
, Correct word choice
and Mobiles
Mobiles
(all calls).
Replace the word
mobile
For example
, the highest category occupied Local — fixed line
in 1999, National and International — fixed line
had half of 100, Mobiles
(all calls) had nearby 12 or 13 minutes
, whereas
in 1995 Local fixed line
had 71 minutes
, National and International fixed line
had 37 minutes
, Mobiles
(all calls) had just 2 minutes
.
Moreover
, in 1996 local fixed line
Fix the agreement mistake
lines
rise
to approximately 80, national and international fixed Replace the word
rose
line
Fix the agreement mistake
lines
grow
to exactly 40, Wrong verb form
grew
mobiles
Correct word choice
and mobiles
climb
to 5. In 1997 local fixed Wrong verb form
climbed
line
had 85 Fix the agreement mistake
lines
minutes
, national and international had 45, mobiles
had 7. In 1998 local fixed Correct word choice
and mobiles
line
Fix the agreement mistake
lines
surge
to almost 90, national and international had 48, Wrong verb form
surged
mobiles
had just 9, but starting Correct word choice
and mobiles
at
2000 local fixed Change preposition
in
line
and national and international fixed line
declined, because local had 85, national decreased to 55, but Fix the agreement mistake
lines
mobiles
started risen to 23. In 2001 local had 78 and national had 60, when mobiles
had 39, but in 2002 mobiles
had 46, although
local had 71 and national just 61.Submitted by dnm.best on
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