The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995 – 2002.

The chart below illustrates the total number of
minutes
of telephone calls in
UK
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the UK
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, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.
Overall
, the chart demonstrates the total number of
minutes
in billions, UK telephone calls, by category, 1995-2002, and call type consists: local — fixed
line
, National and International — fixed
line
,
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and Mobiles
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Mobiles
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mobile
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(all calls).
For example
, the highest category occupied Local — fixed
line
in 1999, National and International — fixed
line
had half of 100,
Mobiles
(all calls) had nearby 12 or 13
minutes
,
whereas
in 1995 Local fixed
line
had 71
minutes
, National and International fixed
line
had 37
minutes
,
Mobiles
(all calls) had just 2
minutes
.
Moreover
, in 1996 local fixed
line
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lines
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rise
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to approximately 80, national and international fixed
line
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lines
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grow
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grew
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to exactly 40,
mobiles
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and mobiles
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climb
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climbed
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to 5. In 1997 local fixed
line
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lines
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had 85
minutes
, national and international had 45,
mobiles
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and mobiles
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had 7. In 1998 local fixed
line
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lines
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surge
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to almost 90, national and international had 48,
mobiles
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and mobiles
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had just 9, but starting
at
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in
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2000 local fixed
line
and national and international fixed
line
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lines
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declined, because local had 85, national decreased to 55, but
mobiles
started risen to 23. In 2001 local had 78 and national had 60, when
mobiles
had 39, but in 2002
mobiles
had 46,
although
local had 71 and national just 61.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, line, mobiles with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number
  • minutes
  • telephone calls
  • UK
  • divided into
  • categories
  • from
  • to
  • overall
  • increased significantly
  • local fixed-line calls
  • accounted for
  • largest proportion
  • throughout
  • period
  • international calls
  • highest rate of growth
  • experiencing
  • sharp increase
  • national long-distance calls
  • remained relatively stable
  • slight decline
  • towards
  • end
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