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Technology is becoming increasingly prevalent in the world today. In the not too distant future, technology will completely replace the teachers in the classroom. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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The advancement of
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 has profoundly impacted various aspects of our lives,including education. There is a growing debate on whether
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 will eventually replace
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 in the classroom.
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technology
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 offers numerous benefits, I firmly believe that it cannot entirely replace human
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,
technology
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 enhances learning by providing access to a wealth of data and interactive tools that can aid in understanding complex concepts. Online resources , educational apps and virtual classrooms have made learning more accessible and engaging.
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, platforms like IBART ACADEMY offer
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 courses from prestigious institutions, enabling students to learn at their own pace.
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, despite these advantages,
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 lacks the human touch essential for effective teaching.
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, human
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 play a vital role in the emotional and social development of students. They provide personalized guidance motivation and mentorship that
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 cannot replicate.
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 can identify individual student needs adapt their teaching methods
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 encouragement and support.
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, a teacher can notice if a student is struggling with a particular topic and provide additional help ,
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 and software may not be able to do
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collaboration and unifying together in groups of students in the classroom
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will be vital
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 for their future careers.
Teachers
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 help each learner in a team that has some difficulties and improving the communication skills of every student is really
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 on instructors. Expressing supportive feelings and empathying if there are unsuccessful days .
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 kinds of activities are inconvenient in
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 environment. By the way of conclusion, AI can do facilities like human
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 but it cannot replicate their duty.Personal interaction, emotional support and social development facilitated by human
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 are irreplaceable elements of education.
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, I disagree with
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 statement that
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 will fully replace
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 in the classroom in the foreseeable future.

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Grammar
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Coherence and Cohesion
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Task Achievement
The essay provides a complete response to the prompt, addressing both sides of the issue yet firmly expressing a personal opinion.
Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present and well-defined, providing a strong framework for the essay.
Task Achievement
You have used specific examples well to support your points, enhancing the argument's relevance and credibility.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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