People increasingly access the news online these days, rather than bying newspapers and magazines to find our what is going on. Some people predict that, because of the spread of Internet news, the newspapers will disappear at some point in the future. Do you agree that newspapers will die out in the future
It is often said that the
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provide
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provides
people
with the latest Use synonyms
news
more than newspapers and magazines.It could be a reason for Use synonyms
paper based
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paper-based
news
would vanish. Humans expect that , because of the rapidly spreading information online. Personally, I completely agree with that statement, as I have witnessed these changes with my own eyes in Use synonyms
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real life.
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news
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connect
us with all information that happens around the world extremely quickly. A majority of Correct subject-verb agreement
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population
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the population
people
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Internet
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recently
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news
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tragical
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tragic
of
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singer’s
death. The post went viral very fast. Correct article usage
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news
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them feel
safety
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number
of injured civilians.
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newspapers
. These facts could cause panic and severe damage to the psychology of humans because of unreliable Change preposition
in newspapers
source
. Nowadays, adults and youth believe everything that they see online. Fix the agreement mistake
sources
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.
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the government
likely
geared towards being knowledgeable about these days.
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strongly believe that paper Change the capitalization
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news
could be vanished in future. Probably , because benefits prevail Use synonyms
drawbacks
of using the Change preposition
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Internet
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's
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people
might go through magazines to check updates. It is easier and faster to use new technology.Use synonyms
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Coherence and Cohesion
To improve coherence and cohesion, work on subsections within paragraphs for a clearer progression of ideas. The logical structure could be strengthened by ensuring each point links smoothly to the next. Use clear signposting language such as 'Firstly', 'Additionally', and 'In conclusion'.
Task Achievement
For better task achievement, ensure that each point made about the future demise of newspapers is thoroughly explored. Some ideas, like misinformation on the internet, could be further elaborated to enhance the breadth of the argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction and conclusion effectively set up and wrap up the piece, offering a clear stance on the topic.
Task Achievement
Good use of specific and relevant examples, like the social media incident, which helps illustrate the arguments effectively.
Task Achievement
The essay provides a comprehensive response to the task, discussing relevant issues such as the speed and accessibility of online news versus traditional newspapers.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite