You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday describe some possible disadvantages say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear

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Dear Coco I am so glad that you are planning for camping.

This

is the best way to utilise your summer vacation.

This

will be a great experience and the best part of your life. Because on camping, you will experience trekking, boating, and climbing etc. During camping, you will interact with an ample number of people and learn about their interests , culture, and language.

Further

, it will help you to gain knowledge and socialization. As we know, everything has its cons and pros. Sunburn can be one of the

disadvange

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disadvantage

disadvantages

of summer camping .

Furthermore

while

camping you might

be face

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unexpected bad weather like

the

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apply

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rain, wind or

strom

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storm

Also

mosqito

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mosquito

mosquitoes

, insects or

encounter

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encounters

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with

wild

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a wild

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animal

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. I wish I could join you but unfortunately, I have a couple of plans for

this

summer holidays,I have to prepare for my entrance exam. Hope you understand. Please share your experience, when you will return from your holidays. Best regards Mona

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I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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8 paragraphs

162 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

tranquility
disconnect from technology
sense of adventure
new experiences
hiking
campfire cooking
stargazing
social bonding
campers
budget-friendly
unique and memorable
bad weather
tent setup
modern amenities
comfort
safety concerns
wild animals
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