Some people believe that it is important to give gifts and presents to friends and family to show that we care about them.Others think that there are better ways to show that we care about them.discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Family and friends are the most valuable
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from god and we have to retain that
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until we die. If we want to retain them in our whole life there are two
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that we have to consider one is giving gifts and
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to them to
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that we
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about them and another
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is that there some other
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to
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our
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discuss
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giving
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a gift
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gift
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to them. giving
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to
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someone
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who is
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a valuable
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person
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in our life will help us that we
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about them and their value so
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they can believe that we love them and they will
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their
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too. and there are
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so many
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like collecting
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in their special
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occasion
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way
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. when we treat
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with memorable
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gift
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and
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that will make them that they are the most valuable
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person
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and
that is
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the best
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to get hope
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us. there
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no
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special things that we should give to them it might be small or big, priceless or not it does not matter the thing is
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whether
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we give
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gift
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a gift
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to our special
person
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or not.
Others
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think that there are better
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to
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that we
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about them. Most
of
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the
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people
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do not expect
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from
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they expect
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do
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to
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we
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love and
care
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about them. there are some
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to make them happy
such
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as
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them
in
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their special days like
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birthdays
and wedding
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anniversaries
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and
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them when they are in trouble and
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them for their effort. it will make them most happiest
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in the world and that will return to us in various
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way
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ways
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. every time we will not be able to give
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gift
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gifts
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to our family and friends at that time our single message can change their moods and
mind
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minds
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. In
fact
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fact,
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people
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don't
care
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that
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we give
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gift
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a gift
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or present to them they expect that
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we love and
care
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them
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so
in conclusion
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, in conclusion,
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giving
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gift
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the gift
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will make
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happy and even if we don't give
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gift
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a gift
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atleast
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at least
we should
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that we
care
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and think about them so that will help us for a
harmonius
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harmonious
relationship with our relatives and friends.

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The essay begins with a clear introduction that outlines both perspectives.
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