The charts below show what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

The charts below show what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.
The presented pie chart and table illustrate the future current employment situations of Anthropology graduates and the
salary
ladder in distinct works from self-employed consultants and those hired by the official sector or private entrepreneurs after working for over 5 years. In balance, the graduates in the Department of Anthropology have a significant majority of exact reports on the situation after leaving university, and over half of them went for a full-time job.
Moreover
, the people who work for the government have a half proportion of the highest
salary
section, which is over 10 thousand. It is evident that of the graduate students that are seen, 80% of them went to apply for a job or
further
study. Accounted for 52% and 15% of full-time and part-time jobs, respectively; the other 13% pursued master’s degrees, 5% of postgraduate students took part-time jobs during their study, and the rest of 8% of students took full-time studies. Moving to the table, regarding the distinct figure among different sectors of
salary
level. The private entrepreneur employees stood out and accounted for 35% of a group of second-level revenues ($50,000-$74,999), which is over two times beyond the freelance consultants and government departments.
Moreover
, 50% of the graduates who work for the government earn over a hundred thousand and are in the summit level of the
salary
situation.
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