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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The line chart
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the amount of carbon dioxide (CO2 )
emisions
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emissions
 per human in four countries namely
United
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the United
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Kingdom
, Sweden, Italy and Portugal from 1967 to 2007. As we see, the average CO2
emisions
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emissions
 of
United
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the United
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Kingdom
was
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were
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 the highest and the lowest average CO2
emisions
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emissions
was
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belonged
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belong
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to
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 Portugal. Italy and Portugal slightly increased from 1967 to 2007. Portugal is a country which had the lowest
the
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apply
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amount of
emissions
, stood at nearly 2
tonnes
 in 1967 and in 2007 over 6
tonnes
emissions
.
Similarly
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 Italy
also
 went up and the
emissions
fluctuate
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fluctuated
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 between 4
tonnes
 to 7
tonnes
 between 1967 and 2007.
By contrast
, Sweden had
singnificantly
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significantly
 increased in 1977
made
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making
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 up 10
tonnes
 and after that considerably fell from 10
tonnes
 to 5
tonnes
 in 2007. The country
had
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that had
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 the highest average carbon dioxide
emissions
 per person is
United
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the United
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Kingdom
 with 11
tonnes
 in 1967 and
remain
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remained
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 unchanged in 1977 but after 30 years they slowly declined from 10
tonnes
 to 9
tonnes
.
Although
 decrease
the
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in the
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 average
emissions
 per human,
United
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the United
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Kingdom
also
the
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had the
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 highest
the
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apply
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volume of
emission
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emissions
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 in 2007.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words kingdom, emissions, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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