The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The given information illustrates the police
budget
in a region in Britain between 2017
to
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2018. The table
demostrates
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demonstrates
the sources of money and the pie charts depict how the
mony
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money
was spent.
Overall
, the whole
budget
was higher in 2017, compared to that of
in
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2018.
While
national
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the national
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governement
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government
governments
had the biggest contribution, the other sources had the lowest combination during
this
period. Regarding to table, in 2017,
national
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the national
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government was 175.5
m
and there was a slight increase in its
budget
in the next year by 2.8
m
. Local taxes saw a dramatic rise in its
budget
in 2018, which increased from 91.2
m
to 102.3
m
. There
were
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less
budget
in other sources which was
lass
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less
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than 40m in both years.
According to
the pie charts, in both years money
spent
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on salaries more than
other
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in other
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catagories
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categories
75% and 69% respectively.
Bulding
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Building
and transport spending ranked the second stage in these years with the same amount
to
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17%. In the first year, expenditure
of
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technology usage was 8%,
while
it had a slight rise
by
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7% more
at the end
of the period.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, m with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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