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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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The given information illustrates the police
budget
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 in a region in Britain between 2017
to
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and
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 2018. The table
demostrates
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demonstrates
 the sources of money and the pie charts depict how the
mony
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money
 was spent.
Overall
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, the whole
budget
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 was higher in 2017, compared to that of
in
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apply
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2018.
While
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national
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the national
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governement
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government
governments
 had the biggest contribution, the other sources had the lowest combination during
this
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 period. Regarding to table, in 2017,
national
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the national
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 government was 175.5
m
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 and there was a slight increase in its
budget
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 in the next year by 2.8
m
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. Local taxes saw a dramatic rise in its
budget
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 in 2018, which increased from 91.2
m
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 to 102.3
m
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. There
were
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 less
budget
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 in other sources which was
lass
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less
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 than 40m in both years.
According to
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 the pie charts, in both years money
spent
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was spent
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 on salaries more than
other
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in other
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catagories
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categories
 75% and 69% respectively.
Bulding
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Building
 and transport spending ranked the second stage in these years with the same amount
to
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of
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 17%. In the first year, expenditure
of
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on
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 technology usage was 8%,
while
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 it had a slight rise
by
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of
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 7% more
at the end
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 of the period.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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