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The graph and the chart below show the number of students choosing different kinds of courses in a university in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph and the chart below show the number of students choosing different kinds of courses in a university in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the preferences of male and female
students
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 for six different courses at a university in 2012.
Overall
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, the data reveals that more
men
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 enrolled in engineering, science, and mathematics,
whereas
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women
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 dominated in social
sciences
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, health, and humanities. Notably, social
sciences
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 attracted the highest number of
students
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overall
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,
while
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 agriculture was the only subject with an equal gender split. In terms of total enrollment, social
sciences
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 were the most popular, with 7,000
students
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, more than double the number registered in engineering. Health, humanities, science, and mathematics followed, each attracting between 2,000 and 2,300
students
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. Agriculture,
on the other hand
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, had the fewest
students
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, with around 400 enrollees. Looking at gender distribution, 4,000
women
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 opted for social
sciences
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, surpassing the 3,000
men
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 in the same field.
Similarly
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,
women
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 outnumbered
men
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 in health and humanities, with approximately 1,500 female
students
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 compared to around 1,000 males.
In contrast
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, male
students
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 were predominant in engineering, science, and mathematics, where their numbers ranged from 1,100 to 2,000, significantly higher than the 800 to 1,000 female
students
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 in these courses. Agriculture,
however
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, attracted an equal number of
men
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 and
women
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, at roughly 200 each.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, men, women, sciences with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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