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The table below gives information about the average number of servings of ice cream sold each day in two different years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table below gives information about the average number of servings of ice cream sold each day in two different years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The given table illustrates the average daily
sales
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 of ice cream servings across two distinct years.
First,
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on
one
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the one
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 hand, the average
sales
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 of hot coffee were approximately 80 in
winter
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 and 30 in
summer
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.
But
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On
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on the other hand
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, iced coffee
sales
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 in hot weather were 40, and in cold
weather
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weather,
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 they dropped to zero. Same with broth
sales
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; the purchases were 50 in
winter
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 and dropped to 25 in
summer
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. It is clear individuals prefer hot coffee in
winter
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 to soup.
Second,
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ice cream purchases in
summer
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 were higher than
winter
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sales
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 by 10%.
Finally
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, the
sales
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of
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apply
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sales
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 in both session
winter
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 and
summer
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 did not change; it was about 25 purchases.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, winter, summer with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average number of servings
  • compared to
  • trend
  • increase/decrease in sales
  • consistent pattern
  • seasonal variations
  • notable discrepancies
  • significant differences or similarities
  • external factors
  • consumer preferences
  • economic factors
  • notably higher or lower sales
  • promotions
  • spikes or declines
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