Some people believe that children should start formal schooling at a very young age, while others argue that they should wait until they are at least seven years old. Explore both perspectives and share your own opinion. Support your response with reasons and any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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Provide more specific examples to support your points. For instance, mention studies, statistics, or real-life cases that illustrate the benefits or drawbacks of early education.
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Focus on developing clear and comprehensive ideas. Explain how early education impacts a child's future more explicitly.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph centers around a single idea for clearer logical structure, slightly more details per argument.
language accuracy
Work on correcting minor grammatical errors and typos for clarity, particularly in your opening section.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, creating a complete and structured response.
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You explore both perspectives of the argument thoroughly, which is key for a balanced discussion.
coherence cohesion
The topic sentences of your paragraphs help guide the reader through each part of your argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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