The table below gives information about the average number of servings of ice cream sold each day in two different years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table below gives information about the average number of servings of ice cream sold each day in two different years. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The bar chart presents the daily
amount
of foods and beverages sold in different seasons in a cafe.
Overall
,
ice
coffee
is the least popular
menu
in
winter
,
while
the most favourite
menu
in
winter
is hot
coffee
.
Besides
, the least favourite foods are
soup
and
salad
,
while
iced
coffee
is the most popular drink in
summer
. In
winter
, only a few iced
coffee
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coffees
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are sold. The cafe serves the same
amount
of
ice
cream and
salad
(25, respectively).
Soup
is the second favourite food during the
winter
with 50
servings
, and the
menu
that reaches the highest
amount
of
servings
is hot
coffee
(approximately 75 cups). During the
summer
, the
least selling
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menus are
soup
and
salad
with 25
servings
. The
amount
of hot
coffee
sold is 30, slightly higher than
soup
and
salad
.
Ice
cream is more
favorable
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favourable
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than hot
coffee
, with 35
serving
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servings
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respectively. And the most demanding beverage is iced
coffee
, with 40 cups sold.
To conclude
, the data shows the number of each
menu
sold in a cafe during
winter
and
summer
. In
winter
, the least favourable
menu
is iced
coffee
and the most demanding one is hot
coffee
.
On the other hand
, in
summer
,
soup
and
salad
are two menus that achieve the lowest sales
while
ice
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iced
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coffee
achieves the most
servings
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, ice, coffee, menu, winter, soup, salad, summer, servings with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average number of servings
  • compared to
  • trend
  • increase/decrease in sales
  • consistent pattern
  • seasonal variations
  • notable discrepancies
  • significant differences or similarities
  • external factors
  • consumer preferences
  • economic factors
  • notably higher or lower sales
  • promotions
  • spikes or declines
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