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The table below gives information about the average number of servings of ice cream sold each day in two different years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table below gives information about the average number of servings of ice cream sold each day in two different years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar chart presents the daily
amount
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 of foods and beverages sold in different seasons in a cafe.
Overall
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,
ice
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coffee
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 is the least popular
menu
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 in
winter
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,
while
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 the most favourite
menu
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 in
winter
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 is hot
coffee
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.
Besides
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, the least favourite foods are
soup
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 and
salad
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,
while
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 iced
coffee
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 is the most popular drink in
summer
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. In
winter
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, only a few iced
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coffee
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coffees
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 are sold. The cafe serves the same
amount
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 of
ice
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 cream and
salad
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 (25, respectively).
Soup
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 is the second favourite food during the
winter
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 with 50
servings
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, and the
menu
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 that reaches the highest
amount
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 of
servings
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 is hot
coffee
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 (approximately 75 cups). During the
summer
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, the
least selling
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least-selling
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 menus are
soup
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 and
salad
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 with 25
servings
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. The
amount
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 of hot
coffee
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 sold is 30, slightly higher than
soup
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 and
salad
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.
Ice
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 cream is more
favorable
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favourable
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 than hot
coffee
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, with 35
serving
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servings
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 respectively. And the most demanding beverage is iced
coffee
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, with 40 cups sold.
To conclude
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, the data shows the number of each
menu
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 sold in a cafe during
winter
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 and
summer
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. In
winter
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, the least favourable
menu
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 is iced
coffee
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 and the most demanding one is hot
coffee
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.
On the other hand
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, in
summer
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,
soup
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 and
salad
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 are two menus that achieve the lowest sales
while
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ice
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iced
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coffee
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 achieves the most
servings
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, ice, coffee, menu, winter, soup, salad, summer, servings with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average number of servings
  • compared to
  • trend
  • increase/decrease in sales
  • consistent pattern
  • seasonal variations
  • notable discrepancies
  • significant differences or similarities
  • external factors
  • consumer preferences
  • economic factors
  • notably higher or lower sales
  • promotions
  • spikes or declines
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