Measures have been put in place to improve road safety by reducing the speed limits. Some people believe there are better alternatives. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Many people reckon that by reducing speed
limits
the government increase
road
safety.
However
others are more down to the idea that there are superior
to
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alternative
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. I personally believe that by decreasing speed
limits
road
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will be safer. Admittedly, there are several better options. First of all, with fines
also
road
will be safer.
This
is because it can help reduce the drivers
which is
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drive
their
car
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extremally
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fast.
For example
, if drivers
drive
their
car
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speed they will fined by traffic controllers and they pay a lot of money for
this
.
As a result
, drivers think about it
bofore
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before
drive
their
car
and they
not
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drive
their
car
speed.
However
, if they do not
drive
cars very fast they will
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. I,
on the other hand
,
this
is true that by speed
limits
highway
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will be safer.
Firstly
it is very necessary.
This
is
ecause
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because
it not only
reduce
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traffic accidents but
also
decrease
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a
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number of human beings
which hitted
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by cars.
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, if
driver
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drive
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slowly it can stop very fast in a dangerous situation like when an old woman
cross
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the
road
and
she
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walk very
slow
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the driver which
drive
her or his
car
slowly
it
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can stop at that time.
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result
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the number of people which cars hit can minimize.
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, if they do not
this
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a
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number of traffic accidents and
also
people
which
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hit the
car
can increase. In
conclusion
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by
minimize
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the speed
limits
highway's
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safety will improve.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph logically follows the previous one, and information is well-organized. Use more linking words or phrases to enhance flow.
task achievement
Expand on some ideas to provide a more comprehensive view. Develop each main point further with more detailed examples or elaboration.
coherence cohesion
Your essay includes an introduction and a conclusion, which help provide a clear structure to your argument.
task achievement
You've included examples to support your arguments, allowing the reader to understand your points better.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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