The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia.

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recieving

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receiving

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news

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in terms of 5 categories.

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online

news

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was the most popular source in Australia, TV

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held the highest share in Canada. As the pie charts show, in Canada the largest percentage was 40% from the TV, followed closely by online at 37 percent. Print

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made up 14

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the smallest trend was not specified was about 3% Regarding

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Canada, the highest figure is 40% from TV shows,

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the lowest percentage is 3% from not specified resources. In comparison with not specified resources, the radio is higher

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4%. and the figure has been doubled in terms of print. The middle is 36% from online.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words news with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

122 words

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The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia.

some people think that constrcuting bigger roads will help to prevent traffic problems

Historic buildings and old neighbourhoods are often preserved in cities to maintain cultural heritage and attract tourism. What role do historic buildings play in modern cities, and should they be protected at the cost of new development?

Multicultural societies, where people of different groups live together, bring more benefits than drawbacks to a country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Because of traffic and housing problems in the cities, the government encourages business to move to the rural area. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Friendships that take place online are not as meaningful as those where people meet each other face to face. To what extent do you agree or disagree?