Some people think that in modern society individuals are becoming more dependent on each other, while others say that individuals are becoming more independent of each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
In the
last
years, some people
said that the individuals
society Change to a genitive case
individual's
individuals'
getting to be
more dependent on helping Verb problem
is becoming
others
, while
there are some people
who think that the individuals are becoming more independent of each other. Both of
views have Change preposition
apply
its
reasons.
On the one hand, the Correct pronoun usage
their
people
who said it is dependent on helping and sharing each
Change preposition
with each
others
are Change to a singular noun
other
on
right in some cases. Change preposition
apply
The
Change preposition
In the
firs
case, Correct your spelling
first
the
humans need each other to complete all of Correct article usage
apply
Add an article
the life
life
tasks. Change noun form
life's
For example
, the company can not just depend on one person or two, it is require
Change the verb form
requires
a groups
of Correct the article-noun agreement
a group
groups
people
who can understand each other to reach to the successful. In addition
, they are need
each other to create new Change the verb form
need
thing
and improve Fix the agreement mistake
things
the
Correct article usage
apply
humanity
Change noun form
humanity's
life
. When they are pull
together, they will make Change the verb form
are pulled
are pulling
the
Correct article usage
apply
life
better and easier.
On the other hand
, the people
who said it is independent of each others
and do everything by themselves are Change to a singular noun
other
on
right Change preposition
apply
also
in some conditions. Firstly
, sometimes the
more sharing is Correct article usage
apply
Add an article
a disadvantage
disadvantage
to the teams because it Replace the word
disadvantageous
is
will make them careless persons, and let the Unnecessary verb
apply
others
do their job. So be
independent and Wrong verb form
being
do
your job by yourself is the main thing to develop your personality.
In my opinion, individuals are becoming more dependent on each other. Wrong verb form
doing
Which
is in fact Correct pronoun usage
This
the
good thing because the most important reason to enhance the lifestyle of Correct article usage
a
people
and make their life
better and easier is by helping and supporting each Fix the agreement mistake
lives
others
.Change to a singular noun
other
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The essay introduces both views on the topic and offers a clear opinion in the conclusion.
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There is a balanced attempt to explore both perspectives regarding dependence and independence in modern society.
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The essay implies a reasoned opinion that substantiates the preference for interdependence.
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