The graph below shows the reported number of cases of influenza in people over 65 in a certain village in the UK from 1985 to 1995

The graph below shows the reported number of cases of influenza in people over 65 in a certain village in the UK from 1985 to 1995
The given line chart compares data about how many people whose ages were over 65 had influenza in a special rural area in the UK between 1985 to 1995.
Overall
, it was important that the number of older generations who lived in
this
village and got influenza increased over the period of 10 years. The diagram presented information about the figure of people, who are really old and had influenza;
moreover
, it hit 40 in the beginning;
then
it climbed moderately to nearly 55 in 1987;
however
, its fashion reduced to just under 50 in 1988;
thereafter
, it grew enormously and touched the vertex at approximately 75 in 1991.
According to
the graph, after 1991 its trend declined somewhat and recorded 60 in 1993;
nevertheless
, it jumped slightly and reported almost 65 in 1994;
thereafter
,
finally
, it went up marginally and in 1995 it scored the number that was the same as its figure in 1993.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reported cases
  • influenza
  • over 65
  • decade
  • peak
  • trough
  • trend
  • seasonal variations
  • fluctuations
  • vaccine availability
  • public health interventions
  • analysis
  • significant
  • population trends
  • data
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