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University students are increasingly studying abroad as part of their studies. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. Give reason for your answer and include relevant example from your experience or knowledge

#university #students #part #studies #reason
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happened
happens
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focus
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learns
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carries
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a
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certificates to feed the knowledge for
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 countries, absoluatly
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hundrads of students maybe a million of them who want to be that
leader
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change
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 the laws and do the
justices
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. Actually all
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 proves that travel abroad
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strong
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 person which the
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government
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depend
 on them, especially when he
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studies
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 hard with a
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foreigner
foreign
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 looked for the truth and help
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humanity to get better life.
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 in another hand he will face a lot of
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tribbles
troubles
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different culture with maybe
unlovley
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unlovely
lovely
 food he must eat it and the
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important
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new
realtions
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relations
relation
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friend
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 and
newporhod
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Newport
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 days we
knew
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 people who went abroad and failed because many
of
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reasons so my opinion is if your age
are
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 under 25 the parents and
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
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befoer
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before
 the young people take the chance they
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 upset and
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regards
regrets
 for taking
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that
 step,
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 I think the disadvantages
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 more
then
 advantages
,
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because I had seen enough and we don't
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 again to anyone.
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coherence cohesion
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task achievement
You have approached a popular topic with a personal viewpoint, which is good for expressing individuality in your writing.
coherence cohesion
You have addressed both advantages and disadvantages, showing an understanding of the balanced-view structure.

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