Some parents buy their childern a large number of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys.
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them
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their
children
a large number
of toys
to play with. While
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toys
for your children
, there is also
an argument that
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there is
is
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are
of
having a large Change preposition
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number
of toys
. This
essay will analyse this
topic from both points of view and exspress
my opinion. On Correct your spelling
express
one
hand, a large Correct article usage
the one
number
of toys
will make children
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children's
mind
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minds
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, they will play and creat
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create
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a small
there
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their
mind
. Fix the agreement mistake
minds
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, more toys
will make them uesing
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using
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apply
mobali
phones less than others. Correct your spelling
mobile
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, if they have toys
they will not playing
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play
be playing
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, there are many disadvantage
like having a lot of Change to a plural noun
disadvantages
toys
make
them cannot realise Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
toys
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the
also
possible to say that, may be
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maybe
them
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their
toys
becouse
they have a large figure of Correct your spelling
because
toys
and if some of them broke
kids are not being sad. Wrong verb form
break
Moreover
, when this
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this child
these children
children
growing up they will be want
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want
evry thing
. Correct your spelling
everything
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instance, they will Change preposition
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be
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apply
there
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thing
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things
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these
how ever
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however
i
tend to believe that a large Change the capitalization
I
number
of toys
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apply
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because
children
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language
Work on improving grammatical accuracy by revising sentence structures and correcting spelling errors for better clarity.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to support your points and strengthen your argument.
task achievement
The introduction correctly outlines the debate and states that both perspectives will be analyzed.
coherence and cohesion
The essay acknowledges both advantages and disadvantages of having a large number of toys, showing a balanced view.
Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion