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Planting trees is very important for the environment. Some people say trees should be planted in the vacant areas of city and towns, while others say housing facilities should be built instead. Do you agree or disagree?

#trees #environment #people #areas #city #towns #facilities
In every country on the planet, there is disagreement around the topic of planting space. With regard to
this
 topic, few consider it is
substantial
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a substantial
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 idea to do planting in free areas of
cities
,
whereas
othera
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others
other
 reckon that more houses ought to
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 in empty spaces.
According to
 my perspective, I
am partially agree
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 with both notions.
To begin
 with, there is no doubt plants and
tree
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trees
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 play a crucial role in human life. Primarily, In big
cities
 individuals are suffering
with
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from
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 numerous problems
air
 pollution is one of them. Folks who are living in urban areas,
they
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are suffering
with
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from
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 some major health-related
issue
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issues
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;
therefore
 if
community
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a community
the community
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 or legal bureaucracy
will do
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trees
planting
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in empty
area
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areas
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, it will aid
to get
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in getting
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 little relief from
air
 pollution and they can live freely in fresh
air
.
For instance
, a recent survey conducted by Time News of India indicates that almost 50%
residents
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of residents
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 who live in
Delhi
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Delhi's
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 main city are suffering
with
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from
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 health problems because of high
air
 pollution.
Consequently
, Planting
trees
 can assist them
in
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to
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 some
extend
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.
On the contrary
, undoubtedly, in
the
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developed
cities
 many people are
affectin
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affected
with
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 housing issues. First and foremost, in
this
 modern era,
the
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 high number of population are moving to urban
cities
 because of high living
standard
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standards
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 and more job opportunities. Henceforth, many main
cities
 are facing
houses
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housing
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 problems.
As a result
,
for
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apply
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to provide good
house
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housing
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 authorities create more houses in free spaces.
For example
, an article written by The University of New York reflects that housing demand in New York
cities
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Cities
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 is increased by 12% in 2022 than
campare
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compare
compared
 to 2018. In a nutshell,
although
 it can be seen easily housing is
a
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 improbable concern to solve in many main
cities
,
nevertheless
,
government
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 and residents should not forget the importance of
trees
 in
animals
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animals'
animal's
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life
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lives
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.
Thus
, we should have to make
balance
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a balance
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 between housing and
trees
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tree
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 areas, and make some feasible solutions to control over population in
main
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the main
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cities
.
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logic structure
Work on improving the logical flow of your argument. While points are present, they sometimes come across as disjointed or lack transition between ideas.
language accuracy
Be careful about minor grammatical errors and word choice, such as 'few' instead of 'some' and 'affectin' instead of 'affected'. These can slightly distract from the clarity of your message.
supporting details
Try to use more specific examples to support your points. This may add depth and strengthen your arguments.
task achievement
Your introduction clearly sets the context of the debate, providing a good foundation for the reader to understand the subsequent arguments.
task achievement
The essay successfully presents a balanced perspective and addresses both the need for planting trees and expanding housing, demonstrating a comprehensive approach to the prompt.
coherence cohesion
You effectively conclude the essay by summarizing the key points and restating the importance of making a balance between housing and tree-planting.
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