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Planting trees is very important for the environment. Some people say trees should be planted in the vacant areas of city and towns, while others say housing facilities should be built instead. Do you agree or disagree?

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In every country on the planet, there is disagreement around the topic of planting space. With regard to
this
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 topic, few consider it is
substantial
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a substantial
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 idea to do planting in free areas of
cities
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,
whereas
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othera
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others
other
 reckon that more houses ought to
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 in empty spaces.
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 my perspective, I
am partially agree
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 with both notions.
To begin
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 with, there is no doubt plants and
tree
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trees
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 play a crucial role in human life. Primarily, In big
cities
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 individuals are suffering
with
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from
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 numerous problems
air
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 pollution is one of them. Folks who are living in urban areas,
they
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apply
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are suffering
with
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from
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 some major health-related
issue
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issues
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;
therefore
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 if
community
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a community
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 or legal bureaucracy
will do
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trees
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planting
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in empty
area
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areas
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, it will aid
to get
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in getting
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 little relief from
air
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 pollution and they can live freely in fresh
air
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.
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, a recent survey conducted by Time News of India indicates that almost 50%
residents
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of residents
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 who live in
Delhi
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Delhi's
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 main city are suffering
with
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from
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 health problems because of high
air
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 pollution.
Consequently
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, Planting
trees
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 can assist them
in
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to
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 some
extend
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.
On the contrary
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, undoubtedly, in
the
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developed
cities
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 many people are
affectin
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affected
with
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by
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 housing issues. First and foremost, in
this
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 modern era,
the
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a
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 high number of population are moving to urban
cities
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 because of high living
standard
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standards
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 and more job opportunities. Henceforth, many main
cities
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 are facing
houses
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housing
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 problems.
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,
for
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to provide good
house
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housing
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 authorities create more houses in free spaces.
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, an article written by The University of New York reflects that housing demand in New York
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cities
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 is increased by 12% in 2022 than
campare
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compare
compared
 to 2018. In a nutshell,
although
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 it can be seen easily housing is
a
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 improbable concern to solve in many main
cities
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,
nevertheless
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,
government
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 and residents should not forget the importance of
trees
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 in
animals
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animals'
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life
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lives
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.
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, we should have to make
balance
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a balance
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 between housing and
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trees
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tree
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 areas, and make some feasible solutions to control over population in
main
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the main
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cities
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.
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logic structure
Work on improving the logical flow of your argument. While points are present, they sometimes come across as disjointed or lack transition between ideas.
language accuracy
Be careful about minor grammatical errors and word choice, such as 'few' instead of 'some' and 'affectin' instead of 'affected'. These can slightly distract from the clarity of your message.
supporting details
Try to use more specific examples to support your points. This may add depth and strengthen your arguments.
task achievement
Your introduction clearly sets the context of the debate, providing a good foundation for the reader to understand the subsequent arguments.
task achievement
The essay successfully presents a balanced perspective and addresses both the need for planting trees and expanding housing, demonstrating a comprehensive approach to the prompt.
coherence cohesion
You effectively conclude the essay by summarizing the key points and restating the importance of making a balance between housing and tree-planting.
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