Aircraft have been increasingly used to transport fruits and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or are out of season. Some people consider it a good idea, but some people oppose it. Discuss in both views and give your opinion.

There are varying views among individuals about the increasing
transportation
of fresh plant-based
products
; whether these goods should be carried by planes or not. Even though making
air
traffic busier contributes to
air
pollution
, from my perspective, accessing
such
nutritions
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is of paramount importance to people. In today's world,
pollution
has become a crucial problem.
Overall
air
quality is being reduced by numerous polluters,
such
as factories, farms and traffic.
Amonst
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Among
these three contributors, factory-related threads are
at
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the
leader
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position.
This
fact does not mean that the traffic-rooted
pollution
is insignificant.
However
,
pollution
that is
caused by
aircrafts
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has
the
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less proportion despite dense
air
traffic. In
such
a context, trading fresh vegetables and fruits by utilizing planes
also
contibutes
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contributes
to
air
pollution
, but
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drawback
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of
this
transportation
does
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not
outweight
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outweigh
the advantages.
Furthermore
, accessing fresh
products
is essential for human health. Unfortunately, not every country is as fortunate as particular ones since climate conditions vary
accross
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across
regions. As consuming healthy foods is the right of every individual, transporting them swiftly is substantial, and it is possible with
airplanes
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.
Such
a solution provides
healthy
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diet
due to
the freshness of
products
, aiding to keep
contibuting
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contributing
the well-being of
whole
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. Take Russia as an example. Because of the harsh climate conditions, Russian citizens are not able to consume indigenous
products
. Thanks to the quick
transportation
, they can consume exotic fruits and vegetables. In conclusion, utilizing
aircrafts
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for fresh food
transportation
increases
air
pollution
;
however
, in comparison to the positive sides of consuming those foods,
pollution
seems less significant.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure precise phrasing in expressing contrasting viewpoints for even clearer contrast.
task achievement
Provide a more thorough examination of the disadvantages for a stronger balance in discussion.
coherence cohesion
The essay presents a well-structured discussion with a clear introduction and conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Logical flow and transitions between ideas contribute to clear coherence and cohesion.
task achievement
The main points are relevant and supported with specific examples like the case of Russia.
task achievement
The argument is comprehensive and fully addresses both sides of the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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