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The graph shows price changes of books in different categories in Australia

The graph shows price changes of books in different categories in Australia
The line graph illustrates how the
price
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 of
books
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 in four categories changed from 1990 to 1993 in Australia.
Overall
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,it can be seen that the costs of
books
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 in all categories increased within the period given.
To begin
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 with,professional
books
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 and children's
books
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 had the same upward pattern.
However
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,they began at different prices in 1990 ,which were 20
dollars
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 and 15
dollars
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 respectively.After that year, the
price
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 of those types rose to reach a stagnant point which was 30
dollars
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 in 1992 for professional
books
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 and 20
dollars
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 in the year 1991 for children's
books
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 and
then
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 they remained constant. The others had more fluctuating patterns.The scientific
books
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 in 1990 had the highest value,accounting for 30
dollars
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then
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 significantly dropped to 20
dollars
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 in the following year.Followed by remained stable from 1991-1992 at the same
price
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 as children's
books
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 and grew exponentially to over 40
dollars
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 in 1993.
Lastly
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, school textbooks had an upward trend with some fluctuation in 1991-1992 yet,the lowest
price
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 in all of the years given.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words price, books, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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