The diagram shows the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.

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indicate the changes that were made to the West Park Secondary

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in the 60-year period after it was built (1950 to 2010).

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, from 1950 to 1980, houses beside the

school

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building gave their place to a parking lot and the science block, which is an extended part of the

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. In the same period

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, we can see that the lands used for farming changed the use to sports

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On the other hand

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, more

difference

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can be seen going from 1980 to 2010. One of which, is the parking area,

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covered half of the whole land and made the field of sports relocate, so the parking could take its place.

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, the playground's size decreased, so it could fit the new sports zone.

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, the road, main

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building and a part of the playground remained untouched during the period.

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block stood the same from 1980 to 2010,

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it was constructed with the

school

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Vocabulary: Replace the words school with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

169 words

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Cultural shock is a growing-phenomena in migrants. What are its causes and effects on migrant?

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