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The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.

The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.
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The presented line graph illustrates the proportion of money spent on
books
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 in four countries (Germany, France, Italy, and Austria) from 1995 to 2005, a period of 10
years
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.
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, spent the most money on
books
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 in Germany over the
years
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, but even so, book sales in the countries increased dramatically.
According to
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 the graph, Germany started with $80
million
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 in 1995 and rose noticeably for the following
years
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 to 1999. Despite a slow decline between 1999 and 2003, it reached its highest sales at $90
million
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 in 2005. In 1995-1999, there was a slight
increased
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 from 30
million
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 to 40
million
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 in Austria. It
also
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 remained stable from that year to 2001,
however
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, by 2003 it had increased to 20
million
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, reaching 70
million
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 in the following 2
years
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. As for France and Italy, both spent nearly as much money on
books
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. Both countries had a rise in book spending from 1995 to 1997 but encountered a drop starting 1997 onwards in Italy.
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, in 2001, France and Italy raised their expenses on
books
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 to 71
million
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 and 61
million
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 respectively.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, years, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • fluctuate
  • trend
  • peak
  • trough
  • correlation
  • digital reading platforms
  • socio-economic factors
  • initiatives
  • cultural influence
  • statistical data
  • purchasing habits
  • book industry
  • consumer spending
  • educational resources
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