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The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminum cans.

The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminum cans.
The diagram illustrates the methods of recycling
aluminum
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aluminium
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cans
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.
Recycing
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Recycling
go
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goes
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throughout
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through
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 many steps. It is
clearly
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clear
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 that, it begins with collecting
aluminum
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aluminium
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cans
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 and
use
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using
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it
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them
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 again in the
last
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 step.
products
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Products
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 are ready for
using
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use
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in
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at
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 the end of
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the methods
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methods
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method
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.
To begin
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 with, collecting
cans
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 from bins.
Then
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 transport them in vehicles. After that, they took it to a special place with cleaning, sorting, shredding, and compressing the
cans
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.
The next step is
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 putting them under heat for several times. After heating and melting them, they transformed
cans
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 into rolling. They became
as
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apply
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a
roll
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role
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.It's thick approximately 2.5mm to 6.6mm.
Finally
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,
cans
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 were recycled again and it was ready to use in various markets.
For instance
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, in
UK
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the UK
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 around 74
percent
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per cent
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 of
cans
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 were recycled.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cans with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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